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John McDonnell
John McDonnell

About me - I am a 54 year old retired civil servant. I have always been interested in writing, and only recently decided to have a go. I like to write short stories in both Ulster Scots and English. That's about it really, but the fact that there is now a 成人论坛 site to encourage new writers has really heartened me.

Unchained Meloday by John McDonnell

The rehearsal studio was icy cool, the air conditioning cranked up to max.

But his bassist was still concerned for his boss and long-time friend.

The still handsome face was puffy, and sweat oozed constantly from a forehead still free from wrinkles. As he sat at the piano, there seemed a quiet air of desperation about him, he sipped constantly at coke and seemed very reflective

Normally he didn鈥檛 like to record a tune that had been a hit for someone else, but the tune was just too good to ignore.

The band stirred uneasily, it was getting to be a real strain nowadays, the mood swings getting more erratic, never knowing if he was going to knuckle down, or just mess about, going off at a tangent, sometimes lost in a world only he could see.

But this was big, a satellite audience of millions, the TV company investing heavily, no day for tantrums or childish behaviour, taking care of business was the watchword from The Colonel,鈥 be firm with my boy鈥 he had told the TV executives,鈥 he鈥檚 had a few problems, but you know he still has the power, y鈥檃ll just gotta coax it outa him鈥.

Looking at the stresses on his boss鈥檚 jump suit, the bassist worried some more, how could his friend have gotten so out of shape? When he looked at the svelte figure on the 鈥68 come-back special, a healthy 12 stones, now鈥aybe 19,all sorts of circulatory problems, and this steaming hot summer wasn鈥檛 helping..It was only June, goddamn, felt more like the back end of August, he was filled with a sense of foreboding, it felt like something was coming, something he was powerless to stop.

An effete looking executive strode over his hands clasped together,鈥 are we ready to get the show on the road sir鈥 he obsequiously inquired of the boss,鈥 sure are鈥 was the languid reply.

Getting up from the piano and wrapping a towel around his neck, the boss led his entourage down a connecting tunnel, closely shadowed by his closest buddies. In the garage he struggled to get into the limousine, sweat continued to pour off him, but the make up girls would prep him, and later it would seem the sweating was caused by the effort he put into his music.

The bassist was nervous, some idiot had the idea that he should hold the mike at the piano for the boss, instead of a fixed mike. What was the point? Still, maybe when the video came out, he鈥檇 get even more letters from girls offering him dates, still he wasn鈥檛 entirely sure.

He hoped the boss wouldn鈥檛 ramble to the audience tonight, that shit was getting weirder, talking about his momma, his dead twin, his army days, weird stuff, still the audience still seemed mesmerised by him, that thankfully hadn鈥檛 changed much.

鈥淥k, ten minutes to show time鈥, the sound of the clapper-board was like thunder, the boss was prepped, and trying to keep cool, his doctor was fussing around and the sounds of the audience were filtering through, adrenalin began to pump around the room. The bassist swallowed a downer to equalise the lift caused by the adrenalin rush, even after all these years the excitement was still incredible, the band was tight, it was just the boss occasionally got a bit unstable nowadays, sometimes it was hard to read him, hard to figure his mood swings. Still, the bassist knew there were many who would kill to have a job like his, backing the greatest entertainer of the century.

And then it was happening, a medley of the old favourites, the boss holding it together, the band hitting every note perfectly, the audience, a mixture of grand-mothers, mothers and teens hypnotised by a legend. Caught up in the moment few noticed the little distress signs, the high notes covered by the backing girls and creative cymbal strikes.

At the piano, the bassist sent up a silent prayer, 鈥漊nchained Melody鈥 required all of 鈥淭he Kings鈥 remaining strength, one flat note would ruin everything, at rehearsal it had been touch and go on several takes, but once the boss decided on a tune, no-one ever could change his mind, but this tune was incredibly tough, with no room for error in front of a live audience. Sure the tape could be edited and sorted prior to transmission, but credibility with an audience was everything.

And then they were into it, the boss totally consumed by the tune, halfway through, knowing he was controlling it perfectly, he turned and gave the audience that famous grin, then he turned his gaze up at the bassist, and years of communication were contained in that look, a cosmic message passed between them, and the bassist knew this was a final moment, it would never come again.

That evening was the last time they would ever play together, less than six weeks later the boss was gone, and the world mourned not just the man and his art, but also a part of themselves which he had taken with him.


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